How to Write a Court Scene

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Part One

  1. Opening Statement –

    »A.An opening statement is a brief overview, not a testimony.

I.    Each side takes one or two minutes to outline evidence they intend to present. The parties often skip this step.

II.    If the evidence is from only a few witnesses, it may not need an introductory statement.

III    Write that the attorney while giving his/her statement is doing an action like making eye contact with the jury or eyeballing the opposing witness in a mean way.

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Example 1:  Attorney Sharla stood, and walked up to the judge, where the curious crowd behind her could also listen in. “My client has been seen holding a knife over the dead body of Jamison.” She paused to look at the man then continued even louder. “Although he is innocent.” The crowd behind her gasped. “Until proven guilty,” Sharla continued, with one finger high in the air, “Ms. Jones should know better.” With full force she slammed her hands on the opposing attorney’s desk.

 

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Part Two

  1. Prosecutor’s Case-

    »A.The attorney will call witnesses. Police officers and detectives can be called too.

I.        The attorney will question the witnesses concerning the facts in the case. After questioning a particular witness, the defendant, then has a right to cross-examine the witness. This means to ask questions concerning the facts to which the witness has testified or about what happened at the time of the alleged crime.

II.       This is still not the time to testify. The cross-examination questions should be about the witness’s recollection of facts. Every witness is treated the same.

III.      The Prosecution and Defense may object to something being said or done during the trial. If the Judge agrees, he/she says, “Sustained!” If the judge does not agree, he/she will say: “Overruled!” If the Judge does not know why the objection was made, he/she will ask: “On what grounds do you make your objection?”

IV.       After cross-examination is completed, the attorney will have the opportunity to ask additional questions about the witness’s answers. When there are no more witnesses, the prosecution will rest or end its case.

Example 2: 

Sharla rose from her position and stood up straight, saying, “I call Rosa to the stands.” A older women with white hair, walked slowly over to the stand. An officer had to help her midway since she took too long.

“IS it true that on the night of February 20, you were in the house with Mr. Cohan?”

“Y-yes I was,” the woman said in a quiet voice; barely anyone could hear her. The crowd leaned in, scooting to the edge of their seats.

“And is it true,” Sharla continued, “that you were the only one in the house with him.”

The old lady lowered her head and nodded.

“I’m sorry, but can you speak up, please.”

“It’s true,” the lady said and she began to cry. The room started to buzz with whispers.

“Order in my court,” the judge demanded.

“I have no further questions,” Sharla said, walking away from the stand with a huge smile on her face.

Ms. Jones, the other attorney went up to the stand holding a piece of paper. “Can you please read what this says, Rosa. Loud enough so that the people in the back may hear you.”

Rosa sat up, wiped a few tears from her red eyes and read what was on the paper. “I will be back shortly, got to pick up some milk from the grocery store.”

Ms. Jones nodded and took back the paper. “This note was found in the kitchen, with the date February 20th written on the bottom. It is possible that Rosa stepped outside the house BEFORE the murder occurred.  Then, not realizing what happened, she came home, put the milk in the fridge and then went to bed, only to wake up the next day and find her nephew dead.”

Ms. Jones  nodded and went back to her desk, this time she was smiling instead of Sharla.

With a brand new attitude, Sharla went back up to the stand and asked the poor old Ms. Rosa several questions. Such as, “Are you mentally ill, are you sure you wrote that note on the 20th and not the 19th? Why did you leave a note instead of just going out to get the milk?” [pullquote] “Are you mentally ill, are you sure you wrote that note on the 20th and not the 19th? Why did you leave a note instead of just going out to get the milk?”

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“Objection!” Ms. Jones proclaimed. “What relevance does this really have to the case?”

“Agreed,” the judge said. “Ms. Sharla, are you badgering the woman in order to confuse her?”

Sharla blinked her eyes innocently. “No, your Honor, I would never.”

“Then, carry on.”

And so she did. Her beauty even had the highest judge in the county melting in her hands. Pathetic, I say, pathetic!

 

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Part Three

  1. Defendant’s Case-

    »A.The character will testify under oath when presenting evidence.

I.        It is not required that you testify. If you choose to, the prosecution has the right to cross-examine you. Testimony should be restricted to facts about the charges against you. You may also present other witnesses at this time. They will be cross-examined as well.

II.      At the conclusion of your case, the city attorney will have an opportunity to call other witnesses in an attempt to refute your testimonies. And, if the prosecution calls rebuttal witnesses, the court will allow you to call witnesses to refute that testimony.

Example 3:  

“Okay, now I would like to call my client to the stand, George Mires.”

George, a tall man with a long beard, bald, and a beer belly, came waltzing over to the stand as if he was in a circus.

“George,” Sharla began, “I mean, Mr. Mires, where were you that night.”

“I was in my bed, cozy with my blanket and a bottle of rim.”

“I see. Was there anyone else there to justify this?”

“No.” George shook his head.

“Well, still….” Sharla stalled for a minute; she probably didn’t think George would say that. “Okay, what happened that day?”

“Welp, I was doing my daily yoga exercise, it’s good for my health, you know (he pointed at his belly), when my neighbor came knocking on my door in a frantic. She told me how her nephew was found dead in his bed and asked if I could call the police.”

“Didn’t you find that odd that she didn’t just call the police herself?”

“No.” George held his head up high. “She was in shock, like she didn’t know what was going on. I would be to.” He looked over at Rosa. “Hell, I probably wouldn’t even be able to dial 9-1-1 correctly if that happened to someone I loved.”

“Mhmmm….” Sharla seemed afraid. Clearly this wasn’t going the way she hoped. I wouldn’t be surprised if she asked George to lie on stand. But I’m glad he told the truth, it serves her right.

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Part Four

  1. Evidence-

    »A.The prosecution has the burden of proof to prove its case beyond a reasonable doubt. Therefore, the prosecution must present evidence at the trial. Failure to appear for trial may result in dismissal of your claim.

I.         You are presumed innocent until proven guilty. As the defendant, you are not required to present evidence at the trial because of the presumption of innocence.

II.      Photographs, videos and some written documents may be used as evidence. The court clerk will number each item of evidence before the trial starts.

III.      The Rules of Evidence generally do not allow notarized and other written statements to be used as evidence. Since the person who wrote the statement is not in court, they cannot be cross-examined. Testifying about what another person said or told you is usually prohibited. In other words, hearsay evidence is considered unreliable because it is secondhand or retold information.

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Example 4: 

“I have no further questions, your honor,” Sharla said this quickly.

Ms. Jones went to the stand, however, even though she believed George was guilty and wanted to attack him with so many questions, she called another witness to the stand instead.

“I call Jordania to the stand.”

Everyone in the room gasped. They turned around to face me as I stood and went to the front of the court. No one was expecting me to make a statement. After all, I did supposedly hate Rosa and her family, why would I help her?

I looked over at Sharla with a satisfying grin. She went pale as a ghost and sunk in her chair.

“Jordania, may I call you by your first name.”

[pullquote]”I am her daughter. The one she gave up for adoption several years ago because she couldn’t handle my attitude.”[/pullquote]

I looked back at Ms. Jones and nodded.

“Good. Jordania, how are you related to Rosa?”

“I am her daughter. The one she gave up for adoption several years ago because she couldn’t handle my attitude.”

“I see,” there was a short pause, “and so you are connected to this story, how?”

I cleared my throat before speaking. “I was there on the night of the murder. I know exactly what happened. I not only have untouched photographs, but I have videos as well. On that night I was visiting Rosa for the first time. I had just graduated with my degree in Business and my life was going well. I had given my life to Christ a week ago and was ready to start fresh with everyone I knew. My friends, my adopted family, and Rosa was last on the list. She was the most important for obvious reasons. I hated her so much.” I stared at my mom, hoping to find comfort. “Anyways, I learned to forgive her for abandoning me and I just wanted to surprise her.”

Ms. Jones interrupted me. “So you went to house and then what?”

“Well, I went to the wrong house, actually. It was George’s house I went to. The door was opened so I walked in. I figured it was my momma’s house, I was family, and there wouldn’t be a problem. Sadly I was wrong.”

The court room went silent. Even the judge had his eyes glued on me.

“Then what happened?” Ms. Jones urged me to continue on.

“I-I saw it. Pictures upon pictures of the victim hanging inside George’s house. He was obsessed with this man to the point of insanity. At first, I thought it was my mom who was insane, because remember, I thought I was in her house. There was clothes in a picture fame and titled “My love” there were loads of shrines with images of Jamison. I nearly threw up. Then, I saw what I wish I would have never seen. Next door, there was a light on. I peeked outside the blinds and saw a large man, standing with a knife over a body.”

“How could you have seen the body?”

“It was on the bed, high enough for many people to see. I only got to witness this because I was in the next door house.”

Ms. Jones nodded. “Then what?”

I ran upstairs, looking for my mom.

“Because you still thought it was her house?”

“Correct. My mom wasn’t there. Instead I found pictures of the man. So I went running down the steps in a hurry to get out of that place, only to be startled by the noises of someone coming into the house.”

“It was George, wasn’t it?”

“Yes.” I nodded. “He was all covered in Jamison’s blood. I took pictures of it too. Also got ones of George standing with the knife.”

“Where did you get the camera?”

“I bought it to take pictures with my mom. Instead I had to take pictures of THIS!”

“Calm down,” Ms. Jones informed me. “We’re almost done. So, what happened after he came in the house?”

I swallowed hard. “He started speaking about what he did.”

“To who?”

“To himself. I recorded it.”

“Let’s hear it.” The sheriff took out my recorder that was in a plastic bag, put it on the juror’s stand and played it.

Gasp! They all said in unison after hearing the recording.

“Thank you, Jordania, that is all for now.”  Ms. Jones shook my hand.

“Sharla,” the judge said, breaking her out of her daze, “Do you have any questions for the witness?”

Sharla shook her head.

 

 

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Part Five

  1. Conclusion of the Trial-

    »A.After all the evidence has been presented, each side has an opportunity to summarize the case in their closing statement.

I.         Five minutes is the limit for each statement. This is a time to review the evidence introduced during the trial. It is not a time to introduce new evidence.

II.       The closing statement is an opportunity to explain your view of the case and evidence already presented. The prosecution speaks first, followed by you as the defendant. The prosecution has an additional opportunity to speak after you finish, because the prosecution has the burden of proof. Each side has the same total time. The prosecution just has an opportunity to split its time between two speeches.

III.      After both closing statements, the court will come to a decision.

Example 5: 

Ms. Jones went to the front of court to make her closing statement. “As you can see, fellow citizens, George Mires was the one who killed Jamison, not Rosa.[pullquote]No sane person could do such a thing– sleep soundly, knowing full well that a dead body is in the other room.[/pullquote] Yes, Rosa was there the night of the crime, however, she had briefly stepped out to get a jug of milk. That was her alibi and there are cameras and witnesses to testify this as truth. With that said, I ask you what woman in her right mind, let alone person, would ruthlessly kill someone, only to go out to the grocery store calmly, to grab a jug of milk. No one!  And then, to have the nerve to keep the body out for one whole night, stinking up your house. No sane person could do such a thing– sleep soundly, knowing full well that a dead body is in the other room. That obviously means she wasn’t aware of what happened. Furthermore, if she did kill her nephew, why didn’t she just hide the body in the back yard? Why did she walk all the way over to her neighbor’s house to call the police? I ask you, jury of the court, to put yourself in her shoes and see if you could do such a thing.”

Sharla was next for her closing statement, though her statement was brief and wasn’t as strong as Ms. Jones’.

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Part Six

  1. Final Decision-

    »A.After closing statements the Judge explains to the jury that they must “make their decision based only the facts presented and not their feelings.”

I.      They also must all agree on a verdict of GUILTY and NOT GUILTY.
After the jury has met, the jury spokesman will give the verdict.

II.       The Judge gets the jury’s verdict by saying and doing the following: First, have the Defendant and defense Counsel stand. Then say, “Members of the jury, have you reached a verdict?” The jury spokesman will stand and say: “yes, your Honor, we have.” (“No, your Honor, we cannot) (If the Jury cannot reach a unanimous decision, then it’s called a Hung Jury.)

III.      The Judge will then ask: “Members of the Jury, on the Case of _______ vs. the United States of America, what you say?” The Jury Spokesman will say: “Your Honor, the members of this Jury find the defendant GUILTY or NOT GUILTY!” The Judge dismisses the jury by saying: “Members of the Jury, this Court dismisses you and thanks you for a job well done.”

Example 6:

The jury came back out in only ten short minutes. The vote was unanimous.

The judge spoke once the crowd silenced. “Members of the jury, have you reached a verdict?”

 The jury spokesman stood and said: “Yes, your Honor, we have.”

Judge then asked, “Members of the Jury, on the Case of George vs. Rosa, what you say?”

The Jury Spokesman cleared his throat before pronouncing, “Your Honor, the members of this Jury find the defendant GUILTY of first degree murder.”

 Loud conversation burst out within the room. The judge had to bang his gavel several times before there was peace again. “Order, order in my courtroom.” He said in a stern voice.

     

    »B.The Judge will now pass sentence of the verdict is GUILTY or release the Defendant if found NOT GUILTY. The Judge will then say, “This court is adjourned.”

I.         The Bailiff will say, “All rise”. When everybody is standing, the Judge will leave the bench.

II.         The trial is now over and everybody returns to his or her seat.

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Example 7:  

“It is time.” The judge said this statement with finality. “I will now pass sentence of the verdict. I agree with the jury on the verdict of guilt, and hereby sentence George Mires to 50 years to life in prison, without parole.”

I watched closely as the sheriff put handcuffs on the large man and took him away. Being that George was already 45 years old, that meant he would most likely die behind bars. Excellent.

When the judge left his bench and the trial was over, I went over to Sharla who looked flabbergasted. She remained still, not moving an inch.

“Sorry bout’ that mom,” I said with a cheerful smile.

[pullquote]”I warn you,” Sharla said, breaking out of her daze for the last time, “don’t come back home.”[/pullquote]

“I warn you,” Sharla said, breaking out of her daze for the last time, “don’t come back home.”

“Trust me, I won’t.” I looked around the courtroom to see if anyone was listening, then said, “If you would have just told me where my real mother lived, none of this would have happened. I would have already been there when that creep broke into their house. I could have saved my cousin, damn it.”

“You don’t know that.” Sharla said.

“My ass.” I was furious. “Because of you, I had to spend an extra week trying to find my mother. Because of you I will never see my cousin’s smiling face. Because of you… because of you my cousin didn’t even know I existed and will never know. What kind of step-mom are you?” I asked with immense anger.

Sharla just looked at me, laughed and then spit in my face. “And for all I did for you, you ungrateful son of a bit—“

I slapped her across her face before she could say the full word. “I don’t want to ever see you again,” I said as I walked off and out of the courtroom, without the urge to look back.

 

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  1. Attorney Shannon Karter rose to the judge, in favour of Detective Kaputo’s statement. Mr Davison, a Black defence Attorney was provided from out of the State.
    ‘Mrs Lee Guan, you were at ACRO gas station in Chinatown on the 27thof July, when your husband was robbed and threatened, correct?’ Mrs Guan looked up attentively; Karter’s compelling stare possessed her.
    ‘Yes, I was there – upstairs’, she replied.
    ‘So you were not at the scene of this felony?’ Karter asked.
    ‘No’, Guan replied, Ms Karter unsatisfied at the information ‘but I did hear gun shots from outside the station’. At least she was telling the truth. Her face was bowed, as if she was concealing preferable answers away from the judge. There was a murmuring buzz from the jury.
    ‘So what happened next?’ Karter asked, drowning patience.
    ‘Well, I went down stairs and…the thief had got away…and my husband…’
    ‘Was he shot?’
    ‘No’. The buzzing noise from the curious crowd rose gradually. ‘But he was about to be shot – ’.
    ‘Objection!’ Shouted Mr Davison. Ms Karter halted with a shudder.
    ‘On what grounds do you make your objection Mr Davison?’ Asked the judge.
    ‘The gun she was in possession of was handed over with an empty barrel, how could the noises you’d heard been from her?’ asked Davison. A frown came across Shannon’s face.
    ‘I-I don’t know’, stuttered Mrs Guan, her face kept pointing down.
    ‘Furthermore, your husband, Mr Guan, was not shot, so it is possible that she was waving an empty-barrelled gun just to scare him’.
    ‘What are you saying Mr Davison?’ the judge said.
    ‘I’m saying that if it were really in her intension to kill the store manager she wouldn’t be armed with something as functional as a toy’.
    Ms Karter sliced her eyes at the defendant thinking ‘Nonsense’ and was to make a swift comeback.
    ‘Objection!’ Shannon strutted towards the scene. ‘Amy is guilty for armed robbery’, she continued. ‘Whether the barrel was empty or not, or had probably ran out while she was shooting, she used it to threaten Mr Guan and obtained his money’. The crowd hummed silently to each other, making suspicions. ‘And if she wasn’t shooting outside, then who was?’ The humming rose with anticipation of the subject. ‘She should know better’, said Ms Karter, smiling as she turned her back to the judge, and directly to Davison. ‘I call Detective Kaputo to the stand’. For there were many more questions she had in preparation to attack the defendant, but she didn’t want to over prosecute. For some information had to be saved until the end. The jury’s’ eyes darted to the handsome man in his forties as he strode to the stand. His hair was a subtle sheen of grey at the forefront; the strands neatly combed back and well presented, just as his case was.
    ‘Mr Albert Kaputo, may I call you Mr Kaputo?’ Mr Davison prepared the question.
    ‘Sure, sure’, Kaputo replied.
    ‘Great. So, Mr Kaputo, did the defendant confess to threatening to Kill Mr Guan at the gas station?’
    ‘Yes. She did’, He said, ‘It’s in the tape’. Shannon smiled, knowing Mr Davison couldn’t beat her; he seamed nervous as if this wasn’t going the way he planned. Another spec of evidence counted by the clerks. The jury gasped. Hums of suspicion became murmurs of conclusion.
    ‘Order in my COURT!’, the judge demand with a military voice. By any means, there was something peculiar about the tape.
    ‘You do realise it’s not fair to pressurize her into giving a confession she didn’t want to. Being a young delinquent she is not as experienced as an adult’, said Davison.
    ‘It was a confession by choice. Besides, she has had experience with the justice system – and has been under custody several times for misdemeanour offences – a criminals are treated the same way’, relied Kaputo.
    ‘How many times?’ asked the Judge.
    ‘Three’.
    ‘So don’t you think by now she ought not to incriminate herself with a statement as such?’
    ‘Agreed!’ the judge proclaimed.
    ‘Mr Kaputo, was the defendant given her Miranda warnings before the statement?’ Asked Mr Davison. Detective Kaputo was silent for a long time. A young delinquent without an advisor or parent and a cunning detective such as himself meant serious investigation.
    ‘Not directly’, Kaputo replied quickly.
    ‘Not directly?! What we’re you planning to tell her right after she’d given you a full blown confession – ?’ Davison confronted.
    ‘She already knows the warnings’. The judge looked distressed, just when she herself thought things were coming to a conclusion.
    ‘Your honour, I would like to ask my client some questions about the obtaining of this information’. The judge was annoyed.
    ‘Amy do wish to speak?’ The judge said Abruptly. She nodded stiffly. Then the judge gave a tired hand gesture that said ‘ask away’.

    ‘Were you aware of the Fifth Amendments the Miranda warnings during your interrogation?’
    ‘Yeah’. All this technical talk made her weary. Oh the weary discombobulation of jargon to a delinquent mind!
    ‘So how did the interrogators get you to confess, was it voluntary?’
    ‘Hyeah!’ she sighed. Over and done with already!
    ‘Amy, please realise I’m trying to help you’, admitted Davison. Her eyes rolled, dismissing the obsolete fact into a world of ignorance. That’s what they all say.
    ‘So it is true you threatened to kill Mr Guan if he hadn’t given you the money, as said in your hand written and taped confession?’, attacked attorney Shannon.
    ‘Attorney Shannon Karter it is NOT your time to question!’ enforced the judge. Shannon sank back into her place. The crowd sounded again.
    ‘No’. What? The jury gasped. A statement Kaputo had build standard evidence upon and she was denying the whole thing? The beginning of the cross examination.
    ‘But your statement clearly says you threatened to kill Mr Guan if he hadn’t given up the money. What makes you now deny?’ asked Mr Davison.
    ‘I never said that, I only agreed to it’.
    ‘Why?’
    ‘Objection! It is not necessary to know why. All that matters is that she confessed and waived her Miranda rights by doing so – ’
    ‘– Let my client speak, Karter’.
    ‘Because I was starving! And bored. No-one wants to be locked in cell for seven hours!’ finally the truth prevailed. Uuuhh! The dramatic crowd gasped again. The judges eyes darted to Mr Kaputo.
    ‘Your honour, my client gave this statement under custody compelled by the circumstances of her release, neither was it a Mirandized statement, therefore making it involuntary’, said Davison.
    ‘Mr Kaputo – what is the meaning for this?’ The judge asserted with agitation.
    ‘Your honour the evidence speaks for its –’.
    ‘– No – no. First you fail to Mirandize her and then you lock her in the interrogation room until she gives a statement of what you want to hear?’ the judge ranted on, coming to her resolute conclusion.
    ‘Your honour there is one more witness I would like to call to the stand’, Shannon interrupted in an abrupt haste. Out of options, and frustrated at Detective Kaputo testimony, she called, ‘I call Sergio Valdés to the stand’. The jury quieted down as did the judge, striving with wonder. I stood up, quite stunned she called me. How would I help her? ‘Mr Valdés, we’re you at the scene on the theft?’ she asked.
    ‘I was outside the gas station store’, I replied.
    ‘So you didn’t see her threaten the storeowner at gun point?’
    ‘No. I was outside’. Mr Davison laughed sardonically.
    ‘When will you have a witness who is actually a witness Shannon?’ he said. she fixated her glassed on her statements, one hand on hip. ‘Hmph!’
    ‘Mrs Lee Guan, Mr Guan’s wife, said she heard gun firing from outside the station, and that her husband was nearly shot. Did this girl fire back at the station before escaping, did you see or hear any shooting?’
    ‘No’, I said, untruthfully and confident. For I didn’t want Mrs Guan’s covering up for her husband to extend the matters, but covering up by blaming it on the defendant clearly wasn’t going to work.
    ‘So the shooting, it was just a pigment of your aural imagination, Mrs Guan?’ attacked Mr Davison.
    ‘But – but my husband told me that she nearly shot him –’.
    ‘Mrs Guan, what your husband told you is not admissible evidence in court. He would need to make that clear for himself bothered to show up’, he ranted ‘ Seriously – enough with the shooting business, is there evidence that actually shows she threatened the storeowner?’
    ‘Objection!’ shouted the judge, ‘this isn’t about Amy’s voluntary or involuntary statement, is it?’ The judge demanded results.
    ‘Your honour, being that the defendant was aware of her right and reminded later on, her written testament and confession on tape was voluntary’, Shannon Karter concluded.
    ‘Although, Your honour, She was not warned of her right before the testament, and confessed under custody of severe conditions. Her statement is also inaccurate according Mr Valdés, a witness that there was no shooting and the gun was retrieved empty’, Davison summed up. The judge examined the evidence long and hard.
    ‘Mr Kaputo, How long was Amy deprived for before she confessed?’ Ask the judge. Shannon gulped. It was a question she didn’t want to hear him answered to.
    ‘Excuse me – Your honour’.
    ‘How long did you detain this girl in a cell, deprived of food, water, the bathroom or any of the above?’ She bounced back more stern.
    ‘Um – no more that six hours your honour’. It was truly about six and a half hours she was kept. The judge made a final vindication regarding the evidence.
    ‘Well – well’, she shuffled the papers, ‘I cannot argue about whether her statement was mirandized or not, but it was still her right to remain silent, and she confessed guilty.’ The jury rose in anticipation, Shannon rose with a grin of excitement, and Mr Davison with expectation of the worst and hope for the best, just as the defendant.
    ‘However, if you forced her to confess by depriving the defendant of her essential needs…I’m afraid I’m going to have acquit Mr Kaputo’s until further investigation’. The jury was shocked, so was Attorney Shannon, and they wailed with anger. For her grin had disappeared and appeared on Attorney Davison’s face. ‘Her statement was obtained by an involuntary confession’, and her hammer slammed to the desk, ‘However!’ The judge slammed her gavel to the desk for order in the court, ‘Armed robbery is a second class felony, and should be charged up to fifteen years in prison.’ Amy’s cuffed hands stiffened. ‘But considering the evidence that underlays the defendants attempt to actually use the weapon is unclear… I will have to suppress those charges’, she looked at Amy then back at the evidence ‘ to 12 months of probation, until acquitted’.

    Mrs Guan strode viciously up to Amy while I watched. She wanted her to pay.
    ‘Listen Pinkie, don’t think your gonna get away with this’, Mrs Guan whispered angrily.
    ‘Hey’, I intervened, walking up to her, ‘why don’t we find out who the real gun holder of the firing was that night and make a case about that, huh?’ I defended. Her eyes crossed Amy, then me as she slowly turned back like a merciful predator. Really, it wasn’t in her power to prosecute Amy further.
    ‘Leave it’, I said.

  2. Yes, mostly. It seemed so realistic. But I had to do a bit of research. My friend feared I had been watching to many crime scene and detective series but that’s hardly the case. I think the drama in the outline, and my research influenced my ideas the most.

        1. Hello Glory,

          May I have more information. Do you mean a pregnant scene where it is a married couple? A teenager? An older woman?
          Other than that, I should be good to go.

    1. Should have surprise pregnancy scene outline up by the end of this week! Would love to read your excerpts for it too, Glory.

  3. This is fairly good however, there are a few errors. Having stood trail for murder though these errors maybe more obvious to me then they would be to other readers. Anyway, nice job. And before anyone makes some off hand comments about my post I will just note: I did say I stood trial for murder I did not say I was convicted.

    1. Thanks for the comment! What are some errors you notice? We’d be happy to look into them.

      -James

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